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The New camper Chapter two
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This one is from Victoria's Perspective
Great, I thought as I fell to the ground. My last thoughts were all about how stupid that was. Its like, Oh hey new people how are you guys! I'm fine let me prove how normal I am by fainting right in front of you. She hoped they wouldn't worry to much about it.
When I woke up I was still on the grass. I opened my eyes to see.. Well nothing. However I could sense four people standing near me, so I spook.
"My fault, sorry to scare you guys."
"Victoria are you OK?" The one named Will asked me.
"Yes I'm fine, just fainting. Promise."
"Come on Victoria, Chiron wants to see you at the big house." Nico told me. I was glad Nico was here. When I got here I was so scared, Thankfully he explained to me what happened and who I was. I felt a hand grip mine and Nico pulled me up from the ground. He led me toward what I guessed was the big house. When I got inside I noticed something odd, I could feel a horse in the house.
Now, before you start thinking I'm insane, Let me explain some stuff to you. Number One, I'm blind. Always have been. Number Two, I can sorta sense things through the ground. Kind of like Echolocation, but different. I can tell if something is standing near me, that's how I don't bump into things to often. Number Three, I can tell things about a person through their hands. That's how i could tell Percy was a son of Poseidon. Number Four, I can use the mist in a special way. I can use it to hid my wings, It's not like the disappear or anything. You just can see them unless your looking for them, so its like i make them unnoticeable or something. Moving on.
When I was in the Big house, I sat down on a seat and we all spook about where I came from and how I got here. I told them my story, How I lived with my dad. How I was blind my whole life. How my dad was killed by a tornado well we were having out vacation near Saint Helen's, and how its explosion killed my dad...
"Wait," Percy said "There was no Explosion near Saint Helens then. That was when Typhon escaped. How could you not tell, If your a demigod. Can't you see through the mist?"
I gave him a look that shut him up pretty fast.
"I can't see at all genius" I said staring at where I was pretty sure he was.
"Oh, right sorry."
"Anyway, I lived in a bunch of foster homes after that, until a satyr came to get me and brought me here, then I meet you guys and so on until the present." I finished.
"I have a question." Percy asked.
"Yes?"
"Can you fly with those wings?"
"I can, but not very far and it tired's me a lot."
"I have a question too," The girl called Annabeth said. "How could you tell our godly parents?"
"About four reasons. One, I could feel it on your hands. Percy's hand feels a lot like the ocean and beach's and such. Yours feels like books and parchment. Two, My sense's told me. Three in the way you speak. Annabeth speaks with knowledge and answers in her voice. Percy's I can feel the ocean in. Four, I could tell in the way you smell, Not in a weird way but like. Percy smells like the ocean, and you Annabeth smell somehow like knowledge."
"That's really cool." Percy said
"Thank you, Anything eles?"
"Victoria, do you have a nickname?" Will said
"Yes, you can call me Tori If you want."
"Victoria, You will stay in Cabin 14. Nico and Will," Chrion said
"Yes?" They both said in unison
"Please watch over her and make sure she learns everything about the camp. I will see three at dinner tonight." He finished
"OK" Nico and Will said.
"Lets go guys." I said "Led me to my cabin."
As we walked I smiled. I think I might just fit in here.
I hope you liked It, I do spend time on these so please read. Ill try to get more chapters on here soon. I do not own Anything but the plot and Victoria. I hope you enjoyed it, If you think i could do better in some way i would love to know how, please tell me in the comments. I'm not very good at writing Fan-fiction so please cut me some slack and don't just post hating comments.
Here is the link to the First Chapter: The New Camper. Chapter one
Thank You For reading, I will try to make them longer. Also, thank you to TheDoorWithin for helping me with some ideas to edit!
Great, I thought as I fell to the ground. My last thoughts were all about how stupid that was. Its like, Oh hey new people how are you guys! I'm fine let me prove how normal I am by fainting right in front of you. She hoped they wouldn't worry to much about it.
When I woke up I was still on the grass. I opened my eyes to see.. Well nothing. However I could sense four people standing near me, so I spook.
"My fault, sorry to scare you guys."
"Victoria are you OK?" The one named Will asked me.
"Yes I'm fine, just fainting. Promise."
"Come on Victoria, Chiron wants to see you at the big house." Nico told me. I was glad Nico was here. When I got here I was so scared, Thankfully he explained to me what happened and who I was. I felt a hand grip mine and Nico pulled me up from the ground. He led me toward what I guessed was the big house. When I got inside I noticed something odd, I could feel a horse in the house.
Now, before you start thinking I'm insane, Let me explain some stuff to you. Number One, I'm blind. Always have been. Number Two, I can sorta sense things through the ground. Kind of like Echolocation, but different. I can tell if something is standing near me, that's how I don't bump into things to often. Number Three, I can tell things about a person through their hands. That's how i could tell Percy was a son of Poseidon. Number Four, I can use the mist in a special way. I can use it to hid my wings, It's not like the disappear or anything. You just can see them unless your looking for them, so its like i make them unnoticeable or something. Moving on.
When I was in the Big house, I sat down on a seat and we all spook about where I came from and how I got here. I told them my story, How I lived with my dad. How I was blind my whole life. How my dad was killed by a tornado well we were having out vacation near Saint Helen's, and how its explosion killed my dad...
"Wait," Percy said "There was no Explosion near Saint Helens then. That was when Typhon escaped. How could you not tell, If your a demigod. Can't you see through the mist?"
I gave him a look that shut him up pretty fast.
"I can't see at all genius" I said staring at where I was pretty sure he was.
"Oh, right sorry."
"Anyway, I lived in a bunch of foster homes after that, until a satyr came to get me and brought me here, then I meet you guys and so on until the present." I finished.
"I have a question." Percy asked.
"Yes?"
"Can you fly with those wings?"
"I can, but not very far and it tired's me a lot."
"I have a question too," The girl called Annabeth said. "How could you tell our godly parents?"
"About four reasons. One, I could feel it on your hands. Percy's hand feels a lot like the ocean and beach's and such. Yours feels like books and parchment. Two, My sense's told me. Three in the way you speak. Annabeth speaks with knowledge and answers in her voice. Percy's I can feel the ocean in. Four, I could tell in the way you smell, Not in a weird way but like. Percy smells like the ocean, and you Annabeth smell somehow like knowledge."
"That's really cool." Percy said
"Thank you, Anything eles?"
"Victoria, do you have a nickname?" Will said
"Yes, you can call me Tori If you want."
"Victoria, You will stay in Cabin 14. Nico and Will," Chrion said
"Yes?" They both said in unison
"Please watch over her and make sure she learns everything about the camp. I will see three at dinner tonight." He finished
"OK" Nico and Will said.
"Lets go guys." I said "Led me to my cabin."
As we walked I smiled. I think I might just fit in here.
I hope you liked It, I do spend time on these so please read. Ill try to get more chapters on here soon. I do not own Anything but the plot and Victoria. I hope you enjoyed it, If you think i could do better in some way i would love to know how, please tell me in the comments. I'm not very good at writing Fan-fiction so please cut me some slack and don't just post hating comments.
Here is the link to the First Chapter: The New Camper. Chapter one
Thank You For reading, I will try to make them longer. Also, thank you to TheDoorWithin for helping me with some ideas to edit!
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Please don't be afarid to Comment how i can do better, I'm no good at writing fan-fiction so please help me become better.
Please don't be afarid to Comment how i can do better, I'm no good at writing fan-fiction so please help me become better.
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Great job so far 
My biggest suggestion to you would be to go back and edit, edit, edit. (Number one rule of any writer), so that you can avoid mistakes like "i" instead of "I" and things like that. In general, when people see errors like that, they are put off by a work because they're under the impression that you just wrote it and posted it without looking it over, and it doesn't seem like it's as worth their time (even though it very well may be!). By going back and fixing those little things, you instantly send a more professional message and establish yourself as a more mature writer, and people will be more invested in your content (This is especially true of fanfiction because many people write it just to write it and aren't serious about it. I can definitely tell that you are trying and are not one of those people! 
)
Keep up the great work, you're doing a lovely job so far!!! I like Victoria!
My biggest suggestion to you would be to go back and edit, edit, edit. (Number one rule of any writer), so that you can avoid mistakes like "i" instead of "I" and things like that. In general, when people see errors like that, they are put off by a work because they're under the impression that you just wrote it and posted it without looking it over, and it doesn't seem like it's as worth their time (even though it very well may be!). By going back and fixing those little things, you instantly send a more professional message and establish yourself as a more mature writer, and people will be more invested in your content
(This is especially true of fanfiction because many people write it just to write it and aren't serious about it. I can definitely tell that you are trying and are not one of those people! )Keep up the great work, you're doing a lovely job so far!!! I like Victoria!